The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement
Science
is blessing people
Change noun form
people's
lives
. sciences should improve people
's lives
. I agree with this
statement. In this
essay, I will give my opinion.
Science
is important Change preposition
to people
people
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people's
lives
. people
cannot work without science
. People
's life
fully depend on Fix the agreement mistake
lives
science
. Selence
is a big part of Correct your spelling
Silence
people
's daily life
. Science
has many important goals. First,
food
sources, and science
can reduce people
hunger. By using Change noun form
people's
science
, made food
many types. Many type
of Change to a plural noun
types
food
machines which is related with
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to
science
and technology. Many years ago people
worked in fields with cows but today by using science
they can use a tractor or many kinds of vehicles. In addition
, science
can reduce bad effect
on Fix the agreement mistake
effects
food
like many natural bad effects. Secondly
, Science
is a big part of people
's education, without science
education system cannot think a second. Science
creates many technologies. One is a mobile phone . By using mobile phones students can read their important studies. Also
, medical treatment depend
on Change the verb form
depends
science
. Doctors always discover new medicines and new medicines can prevent us from bad diseases like COVID-19, cancer and so on. Science
is a useful thing for our life
. Not only a country but also
the world depends on science
.
On the other hand
, science
has many problems. Using science
, people
's knowledge reduce
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is reduced
day
by day
. Because of science
, people
depend on science
every single day
. However
, science
does always not good
outcomes but Add a missing verb
have good
also
it
has bad things Correct pronoun usage
apply
like
many factories on Change preposition
In
company's
important and secret information cannot be hidden. Many hackers can hack factories and famous Change noun form
company
companies
information.
In conclusion, Change noun form
companies'
company's
Science
is a big part of our lives
. Without science
, we cannot think a single day
. Specially
, without Replace the word
Especially
science
we cannot work. Science
related
to our Add a missing verb
is related
lives
. I agree with the statement. Science
is a very important thing in our everyday life
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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that the essay addresses all parts of the task with equal depth. It seems that the essay could benefit from exploring the 'disagree' perspective or acknowledging counter-arguments more thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on improving logical connections between ideas. Transition words and phrases can help guide the reader through the argument more smoothly.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples to strengthen the main points. Specific examples from science that benefit and do not benefit society would provide more support to arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly present, setting the scene and summarizing the argument effectively.
task achievement
The essay contains relevant points on how science impacts various aspects of life such as food production, education, and medicine.
task achievement
Multiple aspects of science and their relationship to different parts of life are mentioned, offering a broad view of the topic.
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