Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The foods and beverages which are produced using a large amount of

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result in health issues. A certain part of society believes that the products which contain

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should be more

pricey

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expensive

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to prevent these kinds of problems. In my opinion,

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is not the right approach

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making people avoid these products.

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, it is more important to inform people about the dangers of

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rather than

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prices. The different lessons and classes at schools and universities should involve information about the dangers of

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in

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the human

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body.

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subjects

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as anatomy can effectively teach the bad impacts of

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on general well-being.

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, a certain amount of

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intake is not harmful

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health.

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is a source of energy which can boost consumer's energy and improve their moods.

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, the extreme prices that have been set for

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goods are not a solution to handle excessive

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consumption. The people with special privileges who are financially wealthy can afford any price that has been assigned to the

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products.

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, there can be specific conditions that high costs may negatively impact the individuals' well-being.

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, a minor part of

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the population

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suffer

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from a chronic disease called "

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crisis" - a disorder in which if the person does not eat enough

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that is

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demanded by

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the body

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, it may cause depression, stress, and anxiety. 

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, the harm of

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in

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human health is obvious.

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some

suggests

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that high

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prices may lead to less consumption, I firmly believe that

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is not a direct solution to the problem and I recommend residents be made aware of the harms of

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.