The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960
The three pie charts illustrate the switch in annual spending by regional authorities in
someland
in 1980 and 1990, 2000 Correct your spelling
some land
homeland
years
in the
all three Remove the article
apply
years
higher education
get
the best Wrong verb form
got
percentage
in annual spending and every ten
years
environmental services improved.
For instance
,Higher education
in 1980year get
the 35 per Wrong verb form
got
cent
and the after ten
year in 1990 higher education
was improved to ten
per cent
,in 2000year the per cent
was decreased to five per cent
.However
, Environmental services was
improved every 10 Change the verb form
were
years
.In the middle of 1980 and 1990 years
the percentage
indicator
was improved by 1per
Correct your spelling
1 per
cent
,but in the middle of 1990 and 2000 percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
indicator
was improved to four per cent
.
In comparison,other expenditure was worsened every ten
years
.In 1980
year the Change the article
the 1980
indicator
was six per cent
,however
in Add a comma
however,
2000
Change the article
the 2000
year
the Add a comma
year,
percentage
indicator
was
worsened to 1 per Unnecessary verb
apply
cent
. Most
volatile expenses Correct article usage
The most
was
k-12 Change the verb form
were
education
and health and human resources, transportation
. the percentages fluctuated widely, and with each passing Correct word choice
and transportation
decade
the percentages either improved or decreased.Add a comma
decade,
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, education, percentage, ten, cent, indicator with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 6 times.
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