Modern forms of communications such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent to do agree or disagree”
Although
some people
claim that modern communication
such
as email and messaging have
impacted negatively their social lives, I believe that it has its own factors that will be greatly beneficial. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Therefore
, I partially agree with this
statement. Also
, this
essay will discuss the pros and cons of this
statement, as well as
how to maintain a great social life while
still using modern communication
.
One of the main reasons that technological communication
is beneficial is that it helps greatly in time
management, which when you strike a conversation you are aware of the time
and can silence the conversation at any given time
. For instance
, when you are on a call with someone, you can just finish your work while
holding your phone on
your ear, Change preposition
to
that
you do not have to exactly be somewhere else comfortable for striking Correct word choice
apply
a
chat or have a face-to-face conversation Correct article usage
apply
while
wasting so much time
for discussion.
Nevertheless
, some people
may argue that it has a negative effect on your social life, such
as, you may become timid and have social anxiety when facing people
or be more distant of
the Change preposition
from
people
who are close to you like your friends
, colleagues
. It is true, I cannot deny that fact. Correct word choice
or colleagues
However
, you can change the cons through only using it when its
necessary, Correct your spelling
it's
while
having the needed deep conversations with them through meeting up and having a really great time
together.
Moreover
, modern communication
can lead to making new friends
along the way. For example
, communication
apps such
as,
Discord and Telegram Remove the comma
apply
helps
you meet new Correct subject-verb agreement
help
people
, personalities
. I wholeheartedly experienced it myself, I have Correct word choice
and personalities
few
Correct article usage
a few
friends
from Discord and it helps me with my social anxiety which I had since I was pre-teen
. Add an article
a pre-teen
Thus
, technological communication
can help in making new friends
also
Correct word choice
and also
reducing
social anxiety.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
reduce
while
modern communication
does have its own disadvantages, it does not mean you cannot prevent them, as well as
, it comes with great advantages too making the negative impacts useless. Therefore
, I partially agree with this
statement.Submitted by pandatvin3 on
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task achievement
Clarify the thesis statement at the beginning to explicitly state whether you agree or disagree, rather than only partially agreeing. This will strengthen your essay's focus.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point. Avoid mixing ideas in one paragraph, which can cause confusion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion and provides a general overview of the essay's direction.
task achievement
Good use of examples, such as Discord and personal experiences, which effectively illustrates your points.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the discussed points and restates your position, providing a strong finishing touch.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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