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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates information about money spent on
books
 in four countries -
Germany
, France, Italy and
Austria
 - over a 10-year period from 1995 to 2005. It is clearly seen that
Germany
 spent more money on
books
 and over the period, spending on
books
 increased in all four countries. The number of people buying
books
 in
Germany
 was 80
million
 in 1995, but
this
 figure rose to 95
million
 dollars by the end of 2005. France and Italy displayed similar proportions with a relatively steady trend between 1995 and 1997, eventually reaching their peak around 2005 (about 50-75
million
, respectively).
In contrast
,
Austria
 saw gradual growth from 1995 to 1999, with
Austria
 overtaking Italy in book sales in 2003 and the figure
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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 sharply to 65
million
 by 2005. In 2005 we see that all countries have increased their book sales, with
Germany
 having the highest sales figures. France and
Austria
 have similar figures,
while
 Italy has the lowest figure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, germany, austria, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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