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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The table below
illustrate
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 data regarding the price of the
water
 which a person needs during a day in five
countries
.
Overall
, it is evident that
while
 the highest cost of
water
 per person is in developing
countries
 and people
in
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there allocate more of their
wage
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wages
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 to
water
, individuals in developed
countries
 are
two
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the two
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 least
countries
 in paying for
water
 each day and devote less amount of their daily wage to
water
.
In
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closer
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 look,
three
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the three
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 highest
countries
 in the daily price of
water
 are Tanzania, Uganda and Pakistan which are 6.4 cents , 4.1 cents and 1.76 cents respectively.
Also
, the
water
’s cost as a proportion of their daily salary
are
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 nearly 6% in Tanzania, almost 3% in Uganda and approximately 1% in Pakistan.
On the other hand
,
countries
which
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 the cost of
water
 is cheaper in comparison with other
countries
 on the table are
UK
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the UK
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 and
US
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the US
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 which both dedicate almost 1 dollar per individual.
Moreover
, people in
there
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their
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countries
 devote approximately 0.01% of their median daily wage for
warer
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women
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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