As society changes, more and more people do not want to stay in one career or job. Many people change their careers and jobs. What is the cause of this phenomenon? Can you give some suggestions to solve this problem?
In opinion to fix that in future.
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, everyone is socially active and they get impressed by watching someone's fake Correct the word
Nowadays
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lifestyle
Tik-tok
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job
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this
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parents must leave some decisions to the children so they can get Add a comma
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