The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the

UK (expressed in percentage terms).

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart illustrates the proportion of changing
pattern
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patterns
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of
access
to 4 types of modern
technology
such
as
CD
player
and DVD
player
and Mobile phone and Internet connection in
home
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the home
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from 1994 to 2008. In general,
accessing
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access
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to all modern
technology
experienced an upward trend over the period, with
DVD
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the DVD
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player
being the modern
technology
with the highest percentage of
access
at home in 2008. The percentage of
access
to
CD
player
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players
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and Mobile
phone
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phones
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were
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was
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always higher than
those
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that
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of the other two modern technologies
however
they
also
experienced a similar trend.
While
the figure for
CD
player
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players
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rose from about 45% in 1994/95 to about 85 % in 2008, the figure for Mobile
phone
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phones
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increased from about 18% in 1996/97to about 80% in 2008..starting at about 10% in 1998/1999, the proportion of
access
to Internet connection as a modern
technology
increased to about 65% in 2008.
Access
to DVD
player
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players
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started In 2002/03 from approximately 30%,
however
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however,
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this
figure rose dramatically to about 80% and continued
geniuenly
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genuinely
to peak at roughly 90% in 2008. Despite
of
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all
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this
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,reading trends
shows
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show
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that
majority
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the majority
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spreads of
access
to
CD
player
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players
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was more popular in those years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words access, technology, cd, player with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adoption rate
  • Accessibility
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Analysis
  • Compare
  • Technological advancement
  • Consumer behavior
  • Economic factors
  • Correlation
  • Percentage
  • Rapid increase
  • Initial percentage
  • Steady growth
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