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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates how the people who live in the UK and currently have no
job
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 spend their free time.
Overall
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, the most popular
activities
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 among
men
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 and
women
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 are mostly the same,
as well as
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 the least popular ones.
However
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, these
activities
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 vary in the morning and in the evening. In the morning the most common activity among
women
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 is housework with 49%. The next two
activities
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 were shopping and
job
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 hunting with 26% and 16% respectively. In comparison to them, 22% of the
men
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 in the morning were looking for a
job
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.
Although
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 shopping and housework were not so much behind with only 2% and 3% decrease to the most common activity respectively. Gardening was much more popular among
men
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. Drinking was the least popular activity among people who were surveyed. But the numbers for the afternoon
activities
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 are not the same. Watching TV rose in popularity drastically to 14% and 12% for
men
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 and
women
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 respectively.
However
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, the top 3 stayed the same for
women
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 with the exception that
job
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 hunting was changed with visiting friends and relatives. The two most uncommon
activities
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 among
men
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 and
women
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 were staying in bed and drinking
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words job, activities, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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