You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In your letter to the hotel manager: Describe the purpose of the meeting. Explain why you were unhappy with the hotel’s service. Suggest what the hotel could do to improve. Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Vlad. I am an HR Director of the Blabla company, which had an all-day meeting in
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hotel
last
week. I am writing
this
letter to provide
a
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feedback about
hotel's
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the hotel's
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service. The company organized
this
event to present next year's strategy to all of the employees. Considering the number of
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in
company
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the company
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, one of the managers of your hotel suggested
to book
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the largest conference room with some
arrengements
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arrangements
,
such
as extra chairs, tables and the scene. Despite we have discussed and confirmed all of the extra
equippment
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equipment
, not all from the list were provided.
To begin
with, no extra chairs and tables were provided before the start of the event and it caused a lot of
inconvenience
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,
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because some guests had to stay for about 20 minutes.
Furthermore
, it took some time and attention to place new seats
while
event
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was
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already started.
In addition
to that, it took 20 minutes more to serve the tables. Considering the issues described above I would like to ask you to improve the quality of your
customers
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service to avoid
such
situations in the future.
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faithfully, Vlad
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task achievement
Try to provide more details about the hotel's service issues to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure proper punctuation and sentence structure to improve logical flow.
task achievement
The letter adequately describes the purpose of the meeting and suggests improvements for the hotel.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a clear structure: introduction, detailed explanation, and a suggestion for improvement.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a formal complaint, offering constructive feedback.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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