The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
chart shows us information about global
population
percentages and distribution of
wealth
by region.
This
essay will briefly describe the main features and compare between regions. First of all,
although
China accounts for around 25 per cent of the global
population
, global
wealth
is not properly distributed to the country. Some countries
such
as India, Africa, Latin America
and
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Caribean countries and other Asia Pacific countries
also
have extremely low propositions of global
wealth
.
On the other hand
, about 35 per cent of global
wealth
is allocated to North America, though their
population
accounts for only approximately 5 per cent of the global
population
. Europe and Rich
Asia-pacific
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Asia-Pacific
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have the same trend as North America. Both in Europe and Rich Asia-Pacefic, the percentages of global
wealth
distribution exceed the one of the global
population
.
To sum up
, most of the global
wealth
is distributed to a limited group of states regardless of how many people live in that area or country.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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