The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure shown below illustrates the
process
of making bricks
for construction industries.
Overall
, brick production is a complex process
and consist
of many steps from collecting raw materials, to preparing it for the heating Correct subject-verb agreement
consists
process
and other important procedures till delivery.
The process
begin
with the digger machine that extracts clay from the ground Change the verb form
begins
need
for brick production. Wrong verb form
needed
After
this
, the chunks of clay are filtered using a metal grid on to
a roller. Correct your spelling
onto
Next
the clay is mixed with sand plus water and formed into Add a comma
Next,
bricks
with help
of a mould or wirecutter.
Ultimately, the freshly cut Correct article usage
the help
bricks
are sent to a drying oven where they are heated for 24-48 hours. In the next stage, the bricks
are placed in kilns of moderate temperature 200-980 degrees and of high temperature 870-1300 degrees. Following
this
, the bricks
are placed in cooling chambers for 2-3 days. Finally
the Add a comma
Finally,
bricks
are packaged and delivered to building industries.Submitted by lithurshan10 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bricks with synonyms.
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