The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the

building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The figure shown below illustrates the
process
of making
bricks
for construction industries.
Overall
, brick production is a complex
process
and
consist
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consists
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of many steps from collecting raw materials, to preparing it for the heating
process
and other important procedures till delivery. The
process
begin
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with the digger machine that extracts clay from the ground
need
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needed
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for brick production.
After
this
, the chunks of clay are filtered using a metal grid
on to
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onto
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a roller.
Next
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Next,
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the clay is mixed with sand plus water and formed into
bricks
with
help
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the help
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of a mould or wirecutter. Ultimately, the freshly cut
bricks
are sent to a drying oven where they are heated for 24-48 hours. In the next stage, the
bricks
are placed in kilns of moderate temperature 200-980 degrees and of high temperature 870-1300 degrees.
Following
this
, the
bricks
are placed in cooling chambers for 2-3 days.
Finally
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the
bricks
are packaged and delivered to building industries.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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