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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data depicts the proportion of
global
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the global
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population
 in eight different countries and the amount of
wealth
 distributed in them.
Overall
, it is evident that despite having
lowest
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the lowest
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residents
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number of residents
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, North America holds
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
wealth
.
Whereas
, India and Africa
is
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are
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 highly populated as
compare
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compared
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 to the
wealth
 of the country. In North
america
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America
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,
number
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a number
the number
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 of citizens
are
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is
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 almost more than 5%
nonetheless
 the prosperity of
country
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the country
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 is 34%. The Rich Asia Pacific and Europe
follows
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follow
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 the same trend,
former
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the former
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 region's capital is 24% and
latter
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the latter
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 is 30%.
The
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apply
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Europe has double the ratio of
wealth
 of the
population
.
Furthermore
, the
population
 of China and other Asia
pacific
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Pacific
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 is 24% and 15% respectively.
Whereas
, the asset of both regions is less than 5
percent
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per cent
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. Latin America and
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the Caribean
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Caribean
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Caribbean
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maintains
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maintain
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 balance with a minimal
diffrence
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difference
 of
sheer
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a sheer
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 3% between
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 and
wealth
. Based on the ratio of the
population
 in India and Africa,
wealth
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the wealth
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 of the countries is negligible.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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