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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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Generally, in 1981
petroleum
 was the most produced fuel,
while
 natural
gas
 was the least produced.
Additionally
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 in
2000
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2000,
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the
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petroleum
 remained on the top list,
while
the
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coal reached the lowest production point Over a 10
years
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year
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 period from 1981 to1991 the
petroleum
 decreased significantly to 100
million
tonnes
 of
oil
, after hitting
it's
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its
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 peak of 140
million
tonnes
 of
oil
 in 1986, during the same period the coal fluctuated and decreased from 80
million
tonnes
 of
oil
 to around 50
tonnes
 of
oil
,
while
 the natural
gas
 remained static. During the period
of
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 1991 to 200 the manufacturing
od
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of
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petroleum
gas
increase
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increased
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 to reach again 140
million
tonnes
.
In addition
to
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the
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natural
gas
 significantly increased to reach 100
million
tonnes
,
while
the
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coal slightly decreased to reach around 38
million
tonnes
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, million, tonnes, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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