Currently children have less responsibilities than they had in the past some say this is a good change some argue that it had negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion based on your personal experience.

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positive
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view which said that
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for children
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children to gain
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problem solving, adapting to live challenges.. etc. But we have to
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that children should not take big
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, that will be risky for child
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.. we have to give a child
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appropriate responsibilities
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Try to organize your essay into clear paragraphs, such as introduction, body, and conclusion, to make the structure more logical and easier to follow.
task achievement
Ensure that you present both viewpoints in a balanced manner before giving your personal perspective, and support them with specific examples.
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You have addressed both sides of the issue, which shows an understanding of the task requirement.
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The mention of life skills and psychological risks indicates thoughtful consideration of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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