The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given are two graphs concerning
dance
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in Australia. The first chart illustrates locations for holding those
classes
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,
while
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the second one compares the popularity of diverse dances between two young age groups. In general, holding
dance
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classes
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are more welcoming in Private places rather than in public places.
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, by ageing, modern arts are becoming more compatible with students’ preferences. Of these locations, artistic ones are the most keen to hold those
classes
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. It is evident that approximately half of the
dance
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classes
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are held at private studios. Yet by far, societal and educational places are the least holders of
such
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classes
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at 18% and 34% respectively. It is interesting to note that ballet class is the most crowded on behalf of those under 11 since it has the highest number of attendees with 600,
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, having the least attendees at 290 between the ages of 11 to 16 indicates its unpleasantness for them. Importantly, Ageing has a tendency to change the students' interest from ballet to modern
dance
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due to
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the fact that it has the highest number of attendees between the ages of 11 to 16.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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