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Writing Samples
Band 4

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...........,

#bus #service #reliability #area #two #weeks #manager #company #addresses
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this
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 email to inform regards about
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bus
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service
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 reliability
service
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 in my area over the
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 two weeks. The primary
issue
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 I have encountered include
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frequent
delay
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, overcrowded people
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 the
bus
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,
missed
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and missed
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service
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 without any prior information to the public. These issues have had on negative impact on
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 routine, especially in my
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, frequently
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 for work, and missing
appointment
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 which increasing stress level in my work
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 the uncertainty and inconvenience caused by the unreliable
bus
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service
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. To improve the solution, I suggest the following actions 1. Provided
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update
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 to people through
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notification
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 in
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the mobile
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 application 2. Implement frequent
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buses
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 in my area. 3. Regular maintenance
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 to avoid breakdown. I hope
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 plan to resolve the problem. I look forward to the reliable and efficient
bus
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service
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near
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 future. Thanks and Regards Dhivya Ravi
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greeting closing
Start the letter with an appropriate salutation, e.g., 'Dear Manager' to make it more formal.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single clear idea and transition smoothly to the next for better coherence.
task response
Develop each point more fully to enhance the depth of task response, such as specific examples of delays.
task response
Your letter clearly outlines the problems with the bus service.
task achievement
The suggestions you offered to improve the bus service are practical and specific.
coherence
The structure follows a logical flow of describing issues, their effects, and suggesting solutions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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