The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901
The table represents
the
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information about how many
employees
and
factories
had in England and Wales in a
fivety-year
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fifty-year
five-year
period between 1851 and 1901.
Overall
, as it is illustrated, there was a considerable upward
trends
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in the
number
of
factories
,
while
the
number
of
an
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average
employees
saw a dramatic fall over the period.
Also
, from the statistics of men and women ,who were employed by these
factories
, it is noticeable that the
number
of male
workers
were
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far more than the woman
employees
each year, despite 1861.
Initially
, the total
number
of
factories
started at 225 in 1851, and
then
this
figure increased to a tiny 227 in 1861.
However
, after
that
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there was a sharp rise to 622 in the next decade, and
then
the index fluctuated over the three decades, at which it levelled off at just 600 in 1901. Considering the
number
of total
workers
, the trend was
opposite
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. Starting from 477 100 the figure
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fell
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dramatically to 291 780 in 1861,following that, the
number
gradually went down and finished at 61 000
at the end
of the period. Moving to the data about the
number
of men and woman
employees
in these
factories
, at the beginning there were 287 100 male and 190 000 female
workers
. The year 1861 marked a turning point, as
a
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numbers
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number
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of both
gender
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began to fall sharply, to 131 780 male and 160 000 female
employees
.
Also
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1861 was
a
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only year in which, the
number
of female
workers
was greater
compering
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comparing
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to the
number
of male
employees
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, factories, number, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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