he pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

he pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for he pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
The two pie charts illustrate a comparison of employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992, categorized by gender and occupation. It is evident from the graphs that there were significant differences in the distribution of employment between males and females during
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period.
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, women were overrepresented in non-manual jobs,
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men were likely to be equally occupied in manual and non-manual
labor
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. The largest proportion of men were employed in managerial and professional jobs, whilst
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for
women, the most prevalent occupation was clerical or related work, accounting for
one third
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of the total female workforce. Far fewer men as opposed to women were hired for
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area,
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and six respectively.
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, only 3 per cent of ladies were busy in crafting jobs,
whereas
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the average for males in
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category was about one in four.
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of the
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had the smallest number of working as a general labourer. The only section where two genders were equal was manual
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, both containing 27 per cent out of all.

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