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The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009.

The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009.
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This
 chart illustrates information about
complaints
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complaints
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the complaints
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 department of a single airline
receive
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received
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 over
six-month
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a six-month
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 period in 2009.
That is
 clear, making
complaints
 in
person
 is more popular than other ways.
Also
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this
 way increased month by month. It is notable
the
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that the
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lest
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last
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complaints
recorded
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were recorded
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 in
June
 by email/fax.
Complaints
 by telephone and in
person
rised
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rose
 each time starting from
Janurary
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January
. In fact, reporting by
personaly
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personally
 is less than
other method
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other methods
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 in
Janurary
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January
 but it
is
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exceeded others in
June
. The rate of
complaints
 is
aproximetly
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approximately
 1900. On
other
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the other
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 hand, email/fax
decresed
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decreased
. The
falling
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 of amount
compliants
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complaints
 started
fro
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from
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Janurary
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January
 and
proceed
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proceeded
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 to
June
.
This
 amount is about 390 in
June
. But using
telephone
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the telephone
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 is changeable across six months. Its peak is 1600 and occurred in
June
 same as
in
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in-person
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person
 way. But its deep level is
diffirence
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different
 from in
person
 that happened
on
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in
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feburary
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february
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, person, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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