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The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.
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changing
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 rate of coffee which three countries exported from 2002 to 2012. It is obvious that the biggest changes occurred
export
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 of
Colombia
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.
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, the least
export
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 happened in 2008 by
Colombia
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.
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Brazil
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 is the leader in the selling of coffee between these countries. It is notable which exports of every country raised starting in 2008.
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 increasing process was continued in
Colombia
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 high level. In 2012,
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export
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exports
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of
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Colombia
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 were 15
billion
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kilograms
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,
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 rate was 5
billion
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kilograms
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 in 2002.
Export
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 raised about 20
billion
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kilograms
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 in 10 years. Selling in
Brazil
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 developed
across
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these
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the
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 years.
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However
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 there was some fall in
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 rate,
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 in 2010
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 level decreased.
Brazil
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 reached 25
billion
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kilograms
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 in 2012.
Difference
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 is 5
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kilograms
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 between Costa Rica and
Brazil
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. In fact, Costa Rica faced a serious fall
as
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Brazil
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 and
Colombia
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, but
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 happened in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, colombia, brazil, billion, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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