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This
graph is showing
us the percentage of Wrong verb form
shows
students
with
different nationalities Change preposition
of
came
to Australia for educational Correct pronoun usage
who came
porpuce
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purposes
Firstly
, it is worth to mention
that Australia Change the verb form
mentioning
intrests
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has
a
high educational standards which Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
make
it Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
as
a popular destination for Change preposition
apply
student
who Add an article
a student
the student
care
about their Change the verb form
cares
educations
quality.
In Change the noun form
education
this
graph
we can Add a comma
graph,
notes
clearly that Indonasian Change the verb form
note
students
have a
largest percentage of Change the article
the
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
in
about Change preposition
at
of
23 Change preposition
apply
thousand
students
and they had Correct article usage
an extremly
extremly
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extreme
increasing
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increase
on
1994-1998 Change preposition
in
due to
difficult
conditions which Correct article usage
the difficult
indonasia
faced with Tsunami cries. Correct your spelling
Indonesia
Next
country is Hong Kong, their Correct article usage
The next
student
reach
Change the verb form
reaches
to
about 18 Change preposition
apply
thousand
student
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students
on
2000. Change preposition
in
Also
we have Malaysian Add a comma
Also,
students
about 18 thousand
as well as
Hong Kong students
percantage
. Correct your spelling
percentage
Last
but not least, graph
shows a Add an article
the graph
nember
of Correct your spelling
number
member
sengapores
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Singapore
Singapore's
students
equals to
19 Change preposition
apply
thousand
students
.
As a consequence
, now we clearly know that Indonasia
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Indian
students
are the biggest percantege
from these four countries.Correct your spelling
percentage
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