The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparis, who were climbing up calmly, with spantanious surges.ons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparis, who were climbing up calmly, with spantanious surges.ons where relevant.
This
graph
is showing
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shows
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us the percentage of
students
with
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of
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different nationalities
came
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who came
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to Australia for educational
porpuce
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purposes
.
Firstly
, it is worth
to mention
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mentioning
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that Australia
intrests
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has
a
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apply
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high educational standards which
make
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makes
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it
as
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apply
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a popular destination for
student
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a student
the student
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who
care
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cares
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about their
educations
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education
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quality. In
this
graph
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graph,
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we can
notes
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clearly that Indonasian
students
have
a
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the
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largest percentage of
student
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students
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in
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at
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about
of
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apply
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23
thousand
students
and they had
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an extremly
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extremly
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extreme
increasing
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on
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in
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1994-1998
due to
difficult
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the difficult
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conditions which
indonasia
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Indonesia
faced with Tsunami cries.
Next
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The next
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country is Hong Kong, their
student
reach
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to
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about 18
thousand
student
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students
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on
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in
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2000.
Also
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Also,
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we have Malaysian
students
about 18
thousand
as well as
Hong Kong
students
percantage
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percentage
.
Last
but not least,
graph
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the graph
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shows a
nember
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number
member
of
sengapores
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Singapore
Singapore's
students
equals
to
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apply
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19
thousand
students
.
As a consequence
, now we clearly know that
Indonasia
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Indian
students
are the biggest
percantege
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percentage
from these four countries.
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