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‏the line graph gives information about the number of people in 4 distinct age groups going to the cinema once or more than once a month in Europe between 2000 and 2011.

‏the line graph gives information about the number of people in 4 distinct age groups going to the cinema once or more than once a month in Europe between 2000 and 2011.
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The line chart illustrates
people
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 number in various distinct
age
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groups
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 who enjoy going to the cinema a month in
once
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apply
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Europe from more than once
2000
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in 2000
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 to 2011.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
age
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groups
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 between 15-24 years had the highest
proportation
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proportion
 during the given period.
However
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,
people
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 around 35 and over
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 were seen as the lowest amount in all time period. Observing the chart in more detail, the number of
people
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 between 15-24
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 climbed remarkably from about 18% to around 51%. Another point to be noticed is that there was a significant sort in
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groups
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 of 7-14 years accounting for nearly 10% and roughly 30% respectively.
In contrast
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, there was a slight increase in the figure for 35-
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groups
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 over 11%. One striking piece of information to be considered is that both
people
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 25-35 and 7-14
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 had an equal amount of approximately 30%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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