The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the renovation of the countryside of Keyisbey from 1780 to 2000.
Overall
, it is clear that
the village witnessed significant changes with upgraded facilities being added in turns of buildings and infrastructure. The most noticeable feature is that there were constructed
more homes and amenities Wrong verb form
are
such
as schools, shops, and sports fields compared to the past.
To start with, in 1780 there had been plenty of wood which was cut down in 1860 thus
providing empty places for homes. There were built
schools, Verb problem
apply
sports
fields to the south of Correct word choice
and sports
this
area in 2000 whereas
between 1780 and 1860 these places were vacant. The shops also
were built in 2000, emphasising its modernity. While
all the farms were demolished by 2000. The wetland for birds was constructed in 2000, enhancing sustainability.
In turn of
infrastructure, the bridge was constructed through the river to connect another area with Change preposition
apply
this
countryside in 1860. The road was built between the river and homes in 1860, while
the second road which links the schools and houses was added in 2000 thus
improving road accessibility and convenience.Submitted by almirasartayeva on
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