A staggering amount of food is wasted every year, both in businesses and households. Why is this happening? What can be done to tackle this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Nowadays,the problem of overconsuming
food
has become an immense
widespread
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problem
for
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our society.
People
mainly can not limit themselves from overbuying
food
to prevent the lack of products in various situations.It is my belief that there can be a number of methods to solve
this
problem.
To begin
with,in diverse bars and
restaurants
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restaurants,
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people
buy a huge number of diverse types of
food
with massive size for a long time.It is hard to predict for restaurants how many
people
will visit there,they calculate the approximate number and usually buy a variety of each product.
Also
,in
households
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households,
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people
mostly buy some more packages ignoring the fact that
food
can
be
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easily be gone off.
For
instance
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they can be busy with their job and having some extra
long lasting
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edible products will
benefit
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benefit them
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.In case
this
cause
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the reason of
mentioned
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problems. To solve these drawbacks there can be diverse solutions,like organizing homeless
centers
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for gaining
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leftovers for charity to nursing homes and orphanages.It is mandatory for restaurants to sort out their costs in an equal way
for preventing
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to prevent
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waste.
For example
,some cafes can give their unusable
food
to ill cats and dogs from outdoors.Or the contained
food
can be given to farmers
for feeding
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to feed
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their animals.
Hence
,
this
solution can create an advantageous effect for
environment
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the environment
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.
To sum up
,
this
can be used for preserving and balancing our lifestyles.These pros can enrich our society and economy
further
.
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Try to elaborate more on the reasons behind food waste to provide a comprehensive response.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear structure to the essay.
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Relevant examples are included, such as references to restaurants and households, which help support the argument.

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