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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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The chart in the first place gives information on the rate of men and women participating in some household chores
while
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 the second one illustrates the
time
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 expenditure of each gender on each workday.
Overall
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, women are in the leading position in terms of doing housework
in particular
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 fields except pet care and housing renovation where men put more effort
as well as
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 repairing homes in the second chart, which seemed to be the dominating areas in
gents
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which gents
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 invest their concern.
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, the cooking section is clearly dominated by females having a number of more than 80% compared to males with a digit of 60% which is more similar to the average
time
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 expenditure chart where the numbers remain almost the same. In
case
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the case
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 of cleaning, more than 60% of
gents
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agents
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 participate with almost 70%
time
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 expended by them. The pet care section seems to be almost
same
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the same
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 in both cases.
On the other hand
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, the house-repairing sector is dominated by males where a shy 20% of men
who
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apply
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spend just less than 20% of their total
time
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 on
this
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender roles
  • Work-life balance
  • Division of labor
  • Domestic tasks
  • Stereotypes
  • Traditional roles
  • Participation rate
  • Disparity
  • Societal expectations
  • Productivity
  • Cultural norms
  • Economic implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Household chores
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