The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

The line graph displays the growth rate of the New Zealand
population
divided
in
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into
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four
age
groups from 1950 to 2050. In overview, people aged over 65 tend to account for the highest number/percentage throughout the given period compared to the rest of the given populations. The fluctuations were experienced in the rest of
individuals
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the individuals
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from
age
45 to 25,
while
the growth rate declined and reached the lowest point for children. It can be seen that the youngest
population
ranging up to 14 years old started with
the
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minimum amount below 10%.
However
, it surpassed the number of individuals between the
age
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ages
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of 25 and 37 in 2000
although
this
age
group had a higher amount of percentage in the beginning. In 2050, the rate of
population
below 14 is expected/predicted/forecasted to increase to 20%, which contrasts
to
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the figure of
population
in the 25 to 37
age
group that will account for the smallest amount of numbers. In the groups of residents aged 38-45 and 65 and over, the fluctuations happened in the middle period starting from 1980 and lasting for two decades. Even though there were some fluctuations, after 2000, they became relatively steady throughout the period and are expected to remain so until the end.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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