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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents variations in
prices
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 of three metals from January to December 2014. It can be observed that all three metals went through the pattern that the
prices
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 increased continuously in the first half of the year, followed by a decrease lasting several months and
finally
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 a rise until the end of the year. In the first two months of 2014, the
price
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 of copper had the fastest increasing rate (6% and 4%).
However
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,
this
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 was surpassed by the growing rate of
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price
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the price
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 of zinc after March. The first metal that saw a slight recession around 0.5% of its
price
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 was copper in May.
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While in
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 the next month, the other two metals
also
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 witnessed
downfall
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a downfall
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 in
prices
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, with nickel reaching the lowest point of -
3
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-3
%. The decrease of
prices
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 of nickel and zinc continued from June to October
whereas
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 the
price
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 of copper only suffered decreasing for two months and started to rise again from July at a level of 1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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