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Band 3.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the layout of Porth Harbour in the year 2000 and how it has been transformed by now.
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, the harbour has many significant changes, including the construction of a new hotel with a private beach, increased capacity for
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passenger ferries, and improved amenities. In the north of Porth Harbour, the main change is the relocating of the former marina to the south to
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 more space for private yachts. The private yacht marina has now
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 the place with fishing boats. The passenger
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 been increased, and the facilities on the north side, which include parking lots, public beach, showers, and toilets, still
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 in their same locations. The southern part of the port has
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 changed. The castle has been converted into a new hotel, and the original public beach is now only used for hotel guests. In the south, new showers, stalls, cafes and shops have been built, and roads leading to hotels and parking lots have been built. The lifeboat station has been in its original position same
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 2000
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Grammar
Be mindful of small grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement or pluralization errors (e.g., 'yachts. The private yacht marina has now change the place...'). Consider reviewing the sentence structure where errors appear to ensure they do not hinder the reader's understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
It can be helpful to clearly signal any comparisons and contrast you are making. For instance, consider the differences or improvements over time regarding both maps. You might want to use transitional phrases to show this comparison more evidently.
Task Achievement
Incorporate more specific data or details if available, to enhance the accuracy and richness of your description. Ensure every major change is highlighted to fully achieve the task response.
Content
The essay provides a good overall comparison between the two maps, identifying key changes and transformations that have occurred in the harbor over time.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a logical structure present, with the essay organized into clear paragraphs that describe the north and south sections of the harbor separately. This organization aids reader understanding.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively uses relevant examples of the changes made to the harbor, such as the new hotel and private beach, which demonstrate a good grasp of the task's requirements.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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