Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer countries. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Health
,
education
and
trade
are crucial for
countries
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a country's
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development. Some people argue that the governments of
richest
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the richest
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countries
should help to mitigate poorer
nations
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nations'
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health
,
education
and
trade related
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problems. In my opinion, I concur with
this
viewpoint because a
country
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country's
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development plays
important
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an important
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role
for
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in
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global economic balance and
evironment
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environment
environmental
issues reduction.
To begin
with, all
countries
in
world
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the world
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are interdependent
for
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in
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their needs and export-import process.
For example
, a large amount of rice
produced
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is produced
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by China and India located in Asia;
others
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other
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countries
such
America
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as America
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and Canada depend on these
countries
for rice import. Food is
first
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and
soremost
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foremost
necessity of every individual.
Additionally
, Japan is considered
as
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technology magnet, a myriad of
advancement
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advancements
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in technology are
realted
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related
to Japan. Conclusively, we can
says
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say
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that
nations
are interdependent. And
health
,
education
and
trade
in any nation
also
effect
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affect
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others.
For instance
, if China and India are unable to produce adequate
amount
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amounts
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of rice for export;
then
prices in other
nations
will increase. Goods and
crops
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production
contigent
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depends
upon
countries
native
peoples
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peoples'
people's
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health
, their marketing, and even
also
on
education
.
Thus
, it is
global
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a global
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responsibilty
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responsibility
to support
a
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nations
a nation
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nations
for their economic balance.
Secondly
, issues pertinent to
environment
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the environment
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can be reduced by
combine
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combining
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actions
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the actions
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of all
nations
in
world
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the world
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.
Nowdays
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, global warming is considered
as
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apply
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unsolvable and the biggest
challenges
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challenge
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to all organisations and
countries
. It cannot
be untangle
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be untangled
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by
involvement
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the involvement
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of one nation; it is
united
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a united
the united
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process.
For example
, research conducted by the newspaper "The Guardian" suggests that
due to
lack
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the lack
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of collaboration of
nations
,
green house
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greenhouse
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effect is now
account
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as
unsolvable
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an unsolvable
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issue. If a
nations
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nation
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is too poor to provide natural gases
such
as CNG and LPG to their natives,
then
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the buring
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buring
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burning
burying
of wood and coal
my
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may
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cause
environment
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environmental
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pollution which gives rise to green
house
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greenhouse
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effect.
Therefore
, to
facilitates
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solutions to
evironment
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environmental
environment
issues collaborative work of
nations
is of paramount importance. In conclusion,
nations
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nations'
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interdependence and equal role in
evironment
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environment
make every country to responsible for other
nations
.
Thus
,
richest
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the richest
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countries
should take care of poorer
nations
in sectors
such
as
Health
,
education
and
trade
.
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Your introduction is clear and well-articulated, effectively setting up the topic and your view point.
logical structure
The essay presents logical connections between global economic interdependence and environmental issues, providing a broad perspective on the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Essential
  • Development
  • Poorer countries
  • Richer nations
  • Responsibility
  • Collaboration
  • Sustainable development
  • Financial aid
  • Technical support
  • Resources
  • Expertise
  • Empowers
  • Local communities
  • Self-sufficiency
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