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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

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The table and charts provide information on the budget sanctioned for
police
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the police
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 force for the
years
 2017 and 2018 in a particular area of Britain where the table reveals the source of the money and charts show the sectors of expenditure.
Overall
, the national government provided a lion’s share of the budget of the police in
both
years
whereas
 the force spent
their
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most of the capital
for
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on
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 providing
salary
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salaries
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 to their staff.
However
, 175.5m and 177.8m euros came from the national government in the
year
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years
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of
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2017 and 2018 consecutively in
police
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the police
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 fund which became the top contributor on the list.
On the other hand
,
source
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sources
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 from local taxes
also
 provided a good amount of treasury to the budget in
both
years
 which was 91.2m in 2017 and 102.3m in 2018
while
 other sources like grants provided the least amount of money in
both
years
 which was 35m and 38.5m euros respectively. Of all income, 75% was used in 2017 for the purpose of salary which came to a slight low in 2018 with a usage of 69% of total income. Meanwhile, the technology sector was decided to be prioritized after spending 8% of total revenue in 2017 and the number increased to 2018 as 14%. Somehow, spending money on building and transport remained unchanged in
both
years
 which was 17% of total income.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, both, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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