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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The given line graph demonstrates the many
of
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visitors
 to Australia by foreigners residents every
years
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year
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.
While
 the table depicts the data of the origin place where are the
visitors
 from.
Overall
,from 1975 the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 to Australia still rise
up
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apply
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to 2005.
Also
 in 1975, Japan
is
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where the tourists
come
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came
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 from the most
however
, it
change
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changed
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 to South Korea in 2005.
To begin
with
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 in 1975,Australia have a
visitors
 at 10
millions
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million
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then
 improve noticeably to around 16
million
. After 1985 it
increase
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increases
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 significantly
8
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by 8
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million
then
 in
last
year
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year,
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 the number end up at about 31million. For the place where they come from,in 1975
visitors
 from South Korea are at 2.9
million
 the
growth
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grew
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 to almost 10
million
, Japan has a
numbers
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number
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 at 3.2
millions
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million
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 and
end
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ended
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 up with 12
million
 China
as well as
USA
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the USA
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 go up mildly from 0.3 with 0.4 to 0.8
along with
 1.1
million
.The numbers
Britain
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in Britain
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is increase
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increased
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2
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by 2
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million
 from 0.9
million
 in 1975
together
with
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in
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 Europe the many
climb
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climbed
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 from 1.1
million
 the climb dramatically
3.4
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to 3.4
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millions
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million
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. The total of
visitors
 from 1975
are
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is
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 8.8
million
furthermore
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furthermore,
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 in
2005
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2005,
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 it
jump
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jumped
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 considerably
21.6
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from 21.6
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million
 to 30.4
million
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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