The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The charts represent showed the second largest figure at about 50%. The smallest index of asking
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information about the major motives for study among students of different age groups and how much support they received from employers.
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Overall
, as it is illustrated, choosing study for career goals was made by a young part of society, meanwhile
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society decided to study for their own interests. Remove the article
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Moreover
, the youngest and the oldest employees heeded the support most.
Initially
,the number
of people under 26 , 26-29 and 30-39 who studied for career purposes showed the largest figures such
as 80%, 70% and approximately 60%, respectively. However
, with the same goals the number
of students at the middle ages and over 49, demonstrated the smallest percentages for about 40% and 20%. Considering studying for interest , the trend was opposite
. Correct article usage
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Conversely
, the number
of old parts of society(40-49 and over 49) gaining knowledge for interest was the largest, reaching 70%.
On the other hand
, around 60% of individuals under 26 years
old asked for support, and help with fees, which was the largest figure than others. In addition
, the number
of employees 26-29 years
old and over 49 years
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