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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, and Turkey) from 1970 to 2010. Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where relevant. You should write about 150 words.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, and Turkey) from 1970 to 2010. Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where relevant. You should write about 150 words.
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The line chart below illustrates
datas
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 about the amount of fruit production in 4 different realms within the time span of 40
years
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. Generally speaking, it can be seen clearly that Spain owned the highest fruit output
throughoutthe
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throughout the
 period,
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 those of France and Germany in turn remained to account for the lowest proportion. It is
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 noticeable that the quantity of food produced in Spain was having a
tedency
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tendency
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contrary to the upward trend in Turkey. The rest saw no considerable transposition from 1970 to 2010. In 1970, Spain’s portion had comprised approximately 5,5
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millions
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 before reaching its peak at slightly above 6
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 after 10
years
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. During the later
years
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, it experienced a gradual decline, falling to just over 5 million
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tones
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 of food manufraction by 2010.
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, Turkey showed a consistent increase in amount, soaring from 2,5 in the first year to 3,5
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 2010. France
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 had a low start with around 1
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millions
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 tons of fruits, rising steadily to the double portion in 1990,
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 witnessed little fluctuation, eventually amounting to approximately 3
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of
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tones
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at the end
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 of the period. Meanwhile, Germany faced a steady decrease, with
a
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production falling from 2,5 million
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tones
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 in 1970 to around 1,2
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millions
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 after 40
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, millions, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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