A friend wants to get some information about an elementary school where one of your cousins studies. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, •say why this school is a good elementary school •mention how expensive it is • explain why your friend should get his/her child admitted there

Dear shan, I am well, I hope you and your family will be
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. I am writing
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because
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you'r
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you
asked
some
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for some
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informations
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information
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about our
cousins
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cousin's
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studies
elementary
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in elementary
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school
. It is a big
school
in our area.
this
school
has many facilities
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those
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are well academic
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curriculum
and
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co-curriculum
co-curricular
,
play ground
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,
class rooms
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classrooms
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, and all of them. All
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were qualified. they are teaching academic and
non academic
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subjects perfectly.
child are
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go to
school
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happiness
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have to know about the expensive. If you like to
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admit
in
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this
school
one person you have to pay
admission
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an admission
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fee
$
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of $
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2000 pounds,
facilities
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the facilities
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fee
is $500 pounds and
exam
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fee
$
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500 without
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the badmission
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badmission
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admission
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fee
you have to pay each
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.
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, I
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prefer
this
school
to your
child
. they are
very
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talented
child
. If you allow
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them to
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this
school
they can improve
there
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their
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educational
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education
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and all skills
quikly
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quickly
. All teachers will be help with them. so you have to
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make
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good
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decisions
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for your
child
. best
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wishes
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structure
Improve the structure by organizing your ideas into more distinct paragraphs.
grammar
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical accuracy to improve clarity in your writing.
vocabulary
Try to use more varied vocabulary to make the letter more engaging and clear.
task response
The letter manages to address all parts of the task: explaining why the school is good, mentioning its expenses, and giving reasons to admit a child there.
tone
The friendly tone of the letter is appropriate for writing to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • innovative teaching methods
  • state-of-the-art
  • accolades
  • pedagogy
  • tuition fees
  • cost-effective
  • investment in education
  • diverse learning environment
  • prospective students
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