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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ag

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ag
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the amount of families who lived in an owned and
rent
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rented
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 home in England and Wales over the period of 1918 to 2011.
In
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An
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overall
 perspective, it is clearly evident that the percentage of individuals who bought
house
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a house
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 saw
an
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 dramatic increase,
in contrast
, those who rented a home declined significantly.
According to
 the chart, the
precentage
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percentage
 of people who bought accommodation
initially
repersented
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represented
 at just over 20% in 1918 and
then
 enhanced significantly
untill
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until
 approximately 70% in 2001 and
reach
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 climax.
Following
this
, it
experience
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 a slight subside to somewhere in the vicinity of 65% in 2011. Moving on to households in rented, the
precentage
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percentage
 stood at almost 75% in 1918, next decline considerably
untill
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until
 2001 and hit the
rook
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rock
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 bottom. After that rose softly to almost 35% by 2011.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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