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You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam

#job #employment #agency #sort #skills #sir #madam
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Dear Sir My name is Daria and I am a student who is passionate
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 arts and handmade things. I would like to work in a friendly team with the same view
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 beauty and
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 who are in love with contemporary style, including clothes. It will be a pleasure for me to join the work of my dreams that will motivate me to work harder for the things that will bring happiness in
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 lives. I finished art school with
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 I am
practicing
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 the art of
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 and dressmaking with the most professional producer. I worked as a help of designer and
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 as a dressmaker at a small shop in Paris. My skills are good and I know that I will be a wonderful worker who will bring the company
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 an international level in future. You just need to see the potential in me and find me a supportive team.
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greeting and closing
Include a closing statement or salutation in your letter.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea, making it easier to follow your main points.
complete response
You clearly introduced yourself and explained your background.
suitable writing tone
The language used in the letter is appropriate and showcases your enthusiasm.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment agency
  • full-time job
  • industry
  • position level
  • responsibilities
  • relevant experience
  • job titles
  • achievements
  • technical skills
  • soft skills
  • certifications
  • training
  • eagerness
  • suitable candidate
  • availability
  • interviews
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