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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the source of income which was allocated for
police
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the police
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 budget in
on
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one
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 of the towns in Britain,
while
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 the pies focus on
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of
this
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money
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 in 2017 and 2018.
Firstly
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, the biggest amount was made by
National
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the National
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 Government with 175 and about 178 million pounds in 2017 and 2018 respectively, meaning that
this
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 factor remained the main source over the period. Local Taxes,
also
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, played a big role here and made 91.2 million in the first year and had a 10% increase in 2018.
On the other hand
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, other sources like grants, only accounted for less than 20% of the total budget. As for the way the
money
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 got spent, we can see in 2017 three quarters of
total
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the total
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 budget was spent on
salaries
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the salaries
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 of officers and staff. Technology used 8% of
this
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money
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,
however
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 in 2018
this
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 value almost doubled and reached 14% at the
expence
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expense
 of salaries becoming lower by 6 per cent.
To sum up
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, there was around 310
millions
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million
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 allocated for police expenses in the period.
Altough
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Although
, the way the
money
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 was used varied throughout the time, but
buldings
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buildings
building
 and transport expenses remained constant.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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