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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter •explain what has happened •describe the bag and its contents •say what you would like them to do about this problem

#week #flight #london #plane #bag #hotel #airline #•explain #•describe #contents #•say
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I recently lost my cabin
bag
in
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on
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 your airline and It was so expensive. I recently had a visit
in
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to
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 your airline from London to New
zealand
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Zealand
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 and before getting
into
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on
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 the plane I
submit
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submitted
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 my cabin
bag
like
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as
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 other people do. But when I
reach
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reached
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Newzealand
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New Zealand
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 and went to take my
bag
 I was shocked that I did not
recieve
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receive
 my
bag
. I remember that I
submit
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 my
bag
with
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to
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 security. My
bag
 is
of
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from
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 Tommy company and it costs too much. It is
of
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apply
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red
colour
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in colour
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 with black
strips
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stripes
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. The
bag
 is of plastic with four tyres and two pockets on the sides. I
also
 wrote my name with
black
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a black
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 marker. I request you that please parcel my
bag
 to my address as I wrote my name, phone number and address of my house on it for the safer side. I hope for a positive reply. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Simranjeet Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Consider providing a clear timeline of events to enhance the logical flow of your letter.
task achievement
Provide more specific details or examples to better fulfill the task response criteria.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, which suits the task well.
coherence cohesion
The use of clear paragraphing aids readability and coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • flight details
  • moment of realization
  • distinctive features
  • valuable items
  • urgent matter
  • retrieving the bag
  • lost and found department
  • customer service
  • identify
  • recover
  • deliver
  • luggage
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