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The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates
that
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the
trasportation
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transportation
 used by commuters in European
country
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countries
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 from 1950 to 1990. There are four types of
mode
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modes
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 of
trasport
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transport
such
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:
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 bus,
car
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, bike and foot which are used by
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regular travellers. Units are given in percentage. In 1950
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car
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cars
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is
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 less used by
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commuters which is 5% but we can see the opposite picture in 1990 which has
been
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increased sharply to nearly 40%. Around 27%
people
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bus
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 in 1970 which was less in 1950 and 1990 below 20% in both
year
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. Walking by foot for going anywhere as travel is more in 1950 , which is above 35% and gradually it decreased to below 20% in 1970 and dropped to below 10% in 1990. Above 25%
people
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a bike
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bike
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bikes
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 as their regular mode of communication in 1950 which decreased to below 25% in 1970 and
plungged
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plunged
plugged
 to 5% in 1990. In conclusion, there is a huge
differennce
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difference
in
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 using
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car
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a car
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 and walking
by
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on
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 foot in the
year
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years
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 1950 and 1990. in
this
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 40
year
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years
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. In 1990,
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car
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the car
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 took the place of
most
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the most
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 used mode of
transporation
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transportation
 by local people.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
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