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The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four counthies in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four counthies in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph
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shows
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 the
men
 and
women
 employed in four countries over 30 year period starting in 1970.
Overall
 it can be seen that the percentage of
men
 and
women
 who were employed in four countries like Belgium, USA, Japan and
Austrila
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Australia
,
whereas
 the percentages of aged 60-64 in
employement
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employment
 by
men
 and
women
.
Further
,
men
 were employed for age was consistently the highest in 1970, and
that
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the
women
 were always the lowest but
two
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the two
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 countries
were
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increased. Looking at the crop data in more detail
it is clear that
 the percentage of
men
 aged 60-64 in
empolyment
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employment
were
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was
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 about 79% and
women
 were
in
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at
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 lowest
19
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at 19
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% in 1970 and 2000 in
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Belgium
while
the
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in the
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 USA,
this
number
 had increased to about 73% and 55 in 1990 and 2000, By
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Japan, the
number
 had
grew
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grown
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 up to about 85% and 74% which were the highest employment.
men
 and
women
were
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employed in
Austraila
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Australia
were
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decrased
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decreased
 from 76% and 47%
in
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between
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 1970 and 2000. Turning to the remaining data sets,
it is clear that
 the
number
 of
women
were
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employed in
the
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Belgium
were
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was
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lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage from 8% to 7%
in
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from
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 1970 to 2000.
This
number
 gradually climbed to about 36% in 1970, and 39% in 2000 in the USA,
whereas
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Japan
was
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slightly increased to about 43% in 1970,
dropped
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and dropped
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 to 40% in 2000.
Women
were
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employed in
the
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apply
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Austrila
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Australia
 fell from 16% in 1970 to 18% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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