The bar chart and line graph give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and line graph give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams depict the information about
participants
who have entered the Olympics since it began.
To begin
with, it is provided with two
grpaphs
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graphics
graphs
. The first one, is a comparison of
number
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a number
the number
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of male and female
participants
,
whereas
another represents the whole
statistic
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statistics
show examples
about people who took place the Olympics.
According to
the graph, I can definitely say, that it was not so popular among women to participate
untill
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until
2012, when the
number
of males and females equalized.
However
, it is seen that during 60 years, the
overall
number
of
participants
has gradually grown. But from 1984 to 2012 it surged to the grade of 10.000 people. In conclusion, the
number
of
participants
in the Olympics has increased about 5 times since 1924.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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