You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter •explain why you think you would be suitable for the job •say what else you could do for the family •give your reasons for wanting the job

Dear
sir
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/madam, I am writing in the context of
advertisement
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an advertisement
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I saw, from you. I believe
,
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apply
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I can be
great
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a great
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fit for
this
role. Because I am
a
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eduactor
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educator
by profession with experience of teaching
Punjabi
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the Punjabi
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language for
last
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the last
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2 years in India which is
also
my
mother-tongue
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mother tongue
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.
Actually
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Actually,
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I feel proud to speak my language
hence
I have not left tutoring
this
language even though most people here speak
english
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English
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.
Also
, I have
certificate
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a certificate
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of award for teaching more than 5000 children.
Although
my main purpose is to serve
other
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others
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with my knowledge as much as I can.
Moreover
, I
also
teach statics and
it's
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anaylsis
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analysis
from basic to advanced
level
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levels
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and hold
degree
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a degree
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in
this
. If there is a need or interest, I can definitely help your children in
this
field too.
Lastly
,
this
job can help me gain some experience in working with pupils from different
country
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countries
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other than India.
Thus
, it is going to be
new
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a new
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learning place for me. I will be looking to get
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from you. Regards Simran
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coherence cohesion
Consider clarifying the structure of your letter by using more distinct paragraphs for each point requested in the task. This could enhance the clarity and reading flow.
task achievement
It would be helpful to provide more specific examples or anecdotes of your experience to strengthen your application.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the use of more varied linking words or phrases for better logical flow between ideas.
task achievement
Your letter includes all required content points, addressing your suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and professional tone, suitable for a job application.
coherence cohesion
The use of greeting and closing in the letter adds a nice touch of formality.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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