The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two
chart
illustrate details about where teenagers in the town in Change to a plural noun
charts
australia
are attending dense Change the capitalization
Australia
classes
, Use synonyms
As well as
the various types of Linking Words
classes
they are currently enrolled in.
Use synonyms
Overall
, there Linking Words
have
significant Verb problem
are
difference
in dancing location and type.Looking into more details, nearly half of the Fix the agreement mistake
differences
classes
prefer to Use synonyms
locate
at private Wrong verb form
be located
studio
Fix the agreement mistake
studios
in
48%, and a quarter of dance organizations, choose school holes to give Change preposition
apply
lesson
after school.One of the features that Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
striking
me most Change the form of the verb
struck
It's
only Verb problem
is that
have
10% Unnecessary verb
apply
Use synonyms
classes
choose Change preposition
of classes
college based
Add a hyphen
college-based
studio
.Fix the agreement mistake
studios
Linking Words
Otherwise
they have 18% company prefer to teach in community halls and other places.In terms of the number of Add a comma
Otherwise,
students
in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
of
11 Change preposition
apply
and11 to16
, choose three different kinds of dance Correct your spelling
and 11 to 16
classes
.
The gap between Use synonyms
Use synonyms
Add an article
the age
age
of under 11 and 11 to 16 is very significant.First of all, the number of Fix the agreement mistake
ages
individual
who are under 11 years old Change to a plural noun
individuals
students
ballet Use synonyms
have
600 Verb problem
is
people
, Use synonyms
rank
the top, And Wrong verb form
ranking
people
Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
aged
age
Use synonyms
of
11 to 16 have a Change preposition
apply
dramatically
change, Change the adverb
dramatic
It
just Correct pronoun usage
apply
have
half Unnecessary verb
apply
Use synonyms
people
study ballet.Change preposition
of people
On the contrary
, There are only 100 Linking Words
people
that Use synonyms
Use synonyms
age is
under 11 keen on modern dances, And Verb problem
are
students
who is Use synonyms
age
of 11 to 16 prefer to study modern dances Use synonyms
increase
considerably.What is more, Verb problem
apply
it is clear that
, whether various Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
students
are keen on tap dances.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, students, age, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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