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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
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The table gives information about the
poverty
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 rate among different Australian household groups in 1999.
Overall
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, the
poverty
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 rate is significantly lower for couples than for single-person families, with sole parents comprising the highest portion.
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, based on the information provided in the table, there is a positive correlation between having
children
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 and
poverty
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. In 1999, 1,837,000
people
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 were identified to be poor, with 21% of sole parents, or 232,000 single parents. the second group with the highest portion of impoverished
people
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 was single
people
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 without
children
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, with 19% of
people
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.
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, the comparison between families with and without
children
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 suggested the portion of
poverty
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 be 5% higher in households with
children
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. Meanwhile, seasoned citizens were proven to be the least poor in society. Elderly couples were allocated to only 4% of the poor,
while
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 the figure for single-aged persons was marginally higher, with 6%, or 54,000
people
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, being categorized in
this
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 group.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, children, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • categories
  • families
  • poverty
  • single-parent
  • childcare
  • income
  • couples
  • dependents
  • older adults
  • pensions
  • unemployed
  • financial resources
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