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The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given charts
illustarte
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illustrate
 the price of
tickets
btween
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between
Sydney
 and Melbourne , over a two-
week
 period on
one
 airline in 2013.
Firstly
 , the
cost
 of
traviling
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travelling
 in
week
 1 from
Sydney
 to Melbourn on a
monday
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Monday
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 was about 80$, in the next
week
also
 on
monday
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Monday
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 the price of
tickets
 went down to 50$
respectivly
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respectively
. Other than that the
cost
 of
tickets
 over the
two
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two-week
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week
 period stays the same .
Secoundly
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Secondly
 the
cost
 of flying from Melbourne to
Sydney
 on a
monday
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Monday
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 in
week
one
 was 60$ and it
decresess
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decreased
 the following
week
 to 40$ the same
decrese happend
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decrease happened
 on
satrday
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Saturday
 in
week
one
 it was 60$ and the
follwing
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following
week
 was 50$ .
Also
 on
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Friday
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friday
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friday,
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 there was a change in the
cost
 of
tickets
 from 80$ in
week
one
 to 60 $ in
week
 two.
Overall
, the price of
ticket
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a ticket
the ticket
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 from
Sydney
 to Melbourn
in
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for
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 two weeks stay
costance
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constant
Constance
expet
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except
expert
expect
 for
monday
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Monday
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 and for the
cost
 of
traveling
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travelling
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arournd
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around
 has slight changes on
friday
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Friday
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,
monday
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Monday
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,and
starday
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Starday
star day
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tickets, sydney, one, cost, week, monday with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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