Same people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today’s
society
many citizens believe that the government has the right to take a major percentage of Add a comma
society,
people
earnings for public services , Change noun form
people's
while
the
others argue that heavy Correct article usage
apply
taxes
are not the best idea. This
essay will explore both opinions and conclude that the disadvantages of high rates outweigh the advantages.
There are both advantages and disadvantages to this
, first of all supporting high taxes
has social benefits and public good: it enable
the government to provide and maintain essential services like infrastructure (roads, bridges), public education, and healthcare. Change the verb form
enables
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
public
funded services ensure that even those with lower income have access to quality education and healthcare, leading to a more balanced society. Replace the word
publicly
For
example
Countries like Sweden and Denmark have high tax rates but offer comprehensive social welfare programs and maintain high standards of living.
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example,
However
, high taxes
are an economical
burden on individuals, Replace the word
economic
this
can lead to a reduced disposable income, making it harder for individuals to afford their personal needs and save for the future. Furthermore
heavy Add a comma
Furthermore,
taxes
may lead to a country
Change noun form
country's
economical
downfall Replace the word
economic
,
since it discourage entrepreneurs and investors. When Remove the comma
apply
business
face high Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
taxes
they may relocate to countrys
with lower rates. reducing job opportunities and economic growth. Correct your spelling
countries
for
instance
lower-tax countries like the United Add a comma
instance,
states
attract businesses and skilled workers seeking more Capitalize word
States
favorable
tax conditions.
In conclusion , both views are understandable and have strong arguments but it seems to me that having low Change the spelling
favourable
taxes
would be a far better phenomenal
for the citizens of Replace the word
phenomenon
todays
era.Change to a genitive case
today's
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