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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the price of
fuel
, which has increased all over the world.
People
 are now beginning to realize that rising
fuel
 prices are affecting their daily lives. Personally, I tend to think that the government should
increase
fuel
 prices to reduce the air pollution that cars produce.
Firstly
, it is well known that
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of quantity
fuel
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 daily life acts to reduce
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 energy
resourse
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source
, that affectes to
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 the world. what
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 mean here is that
people
 from
over
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 the world
shoud
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should
 reduce to use the
fuel
consuptions
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consumption
consumptions
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for conservation and
reducing
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 dependency on non-renewable power sources. One of the main reasons behind
that is
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people's
 tools, that
people
 produce
such
 as cars, homes, the
onother equipments
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other equipment
 are
incresing
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increasing
 nowadays.
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 the other hand, it can
also
 be argued that increasing the price of fuels,
the
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 main approach to conserved air pollution.
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 to say government should
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implemented
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 higher taxes on
fuel
 have seen a significant reduction in its usage. Take,
for example
, countries where the government begins to
increase
 taxes, air pollution decreases significantly, compared to countries that did not pass
this
 law. In conclusion, taking
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everything
 mentioned into account in our final analysis we can
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 that the
increase
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 price of
fuel
 over the
last
 decade
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 us the
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majority
 benefits, than drawbacks, that to continue to save
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everything
 for our future generation.
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Work on strengthening your arguments with more specific and relevant examples. This will enhance the support for your main points and increase the depth of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next. Try using cohesive devices and linking phrases to improve the logical structure of your essay.
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Be careful with your grammatical accuracy and vocabulary choices. Improving these areas will help in conveying your points more clearly and effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed the issue of fuel prices and its implications on consumption and resources, which shows a good understanding of the prompt.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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