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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The figure below presents the amount of
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 from drug companies in 3 regions namely America, Asia, and Europe in the period between 2002 to 2006.
Overall
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, Europe and Asia show a relatively rising trend in exports
while
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 America has a reduction in numbers in the given time period. In 2002, America was the top region in
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.
Although
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 starting in 2004, it experienced a steady decrease in numbers and by 2006 it was already under 11% from its original figure.
Conversely
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, Asia was at the bottom in 2002 with
sales
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 only at 25%.
However
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, throughout the years, it has continuously increased its
sales
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 of pharmaceutical products by approximately 5% each year, gaining 15% in the span of 4 years.
Moreover
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, Europe had a fluctuating trend. It had a 4% increase from 2002 to 2004.
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, in the following years, its numbers steadily decreased reaching 30% in 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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