The charts below give information about children under 18 learning musical instruments in one region of the UK in 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate vividly the percentage of
children
under 18 learning musical instruments
in one particular area in the UK between 1996 and 2016, while
the bar chart displays their choice of musical instruments
.
As a whole, it is evident that the number of children
studying musical instruments
increased drastically over the given period. Besides
, piano and keyboard seemed to be a priority selection of British children
in both measured years.
Focusing initially
on the first two pie charts, in 1996, 44% of children
learned how to play musical instruments
, while
the remaining 56% did not. However
, after only 10 years, this
number witnessed a significant increase, accounting for more than three-quarters of all children
in the UK.
Turning attention to the bar chart, it is clear that
piano was the top choice of children
in 1996, with 30%, but it slightly reduced to 28% in 2006. This
similar downwards
trend can be easily seen in acoustic guitarChange the word
downward
,
and violin. Remove the comma
apply
By contrast
, keyboard and electric guitar had a
significant growth in the same period, with 23% to 30% in the keyboard, and 12% to 16% in electric guitar. Remove the article
apply
Additionally
, the ratio of children
playing more than one instrument remained unchanged at 12% in both years.Submitted by elsenglish16992 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, instruments with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!